Blood Ray ([info]pribeoblibe) wrote,
@ 2005-03-05 01:30:00
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My first haiku
Old resentment burns
Surprising even me; so
Palpable and strong

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Gold star for the day!
(Anonymous)
2005-03-05 02:27 pm UTC (link)
Haiku: A strict form of Japanese poetry consisting of 3 lines.

Format:
First Line 5 Syllables
Second Line 7 Syllables
Third Line 5 Syllables

Perfect in format and perfect in substance!!! You get a gold star for the day! (Oh if I could just give you a noogie!)

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Re: Gold star for the day!
[info]pribeoblibe
2005-03-05 11:55 pm UTC (link)
One of my new year's resolutions was to stop receiving "noogies" from strangers.

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Re: Gold star for the day!
(Anonymous)
2005-03-06 03:14 am UTC (link)
:-( o.k.

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Re: Gold star for the day!
[info]pribeoblibe
2005-03-06 10:18 pm UTC (link)
But give me enough vodka and you may change my mind.

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[info]clipgirl
2005-03-05 06:50 pm UTC (link)
Nice

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raej
(Anonymous)
2005-03-06 07:53 pm UTC (link)
cool.

and yet, i'm sorry for the extremity of emotion.

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Re: raej
[info]pribeoblibe
2005-03-06 11:13 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. The events leading up to the writing of the haiku were alcohol-fueled, so in retrospect I found that things weren't nearly as extreme as I had originally thought. And the person about whom I wrote the haiku knew immediately that it was directed at him, so the ruse of haiku didn't quite work for me. :)

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my first haiku
(Anonymous)
2005-03-06 11:03 pm UTC (link)
I wrote my first haiku in December. If you're like me, you'll find it's addictive. I've had resentments like that but not for many years now. "Palpable" is a well-chosen word.

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(Anonymous)
2005-03-11 11:40 pm UTC (link)
I have to admit, getting dissed in haiku form is not nearly as bad as getting dissed by normal means. Notice the word "normal."

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[info]pribeoblibe
2005-03-12 12:24 am UTC (link)
I notice it. Is it going to get up and do a number?

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